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espeon

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Registered: 2006-02-05

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Ballads

I had to do a ballad for english homework so this is it. plz rate it 1 to 10. 10 being the best and 1 the worst

Cries of the river

From mountains to seas, hear it cry
a single white thread that mourns
for when you hear the sadness and sorrow
a whole new picture is drawn

for years and decades it withers
losing hope every single day
for at least some sign of gratitude
or else someday they'll pay

both men and women, children too
laughs under the moonlit moor
but they do not realise what lies beneath
justlike in the mystical lore

a great water beast, in silence
who strikes under the dark red moon
a great water beast, in silence
who just might attack quite soon

sometimes it drags you underneath
leading you to a watery grave
after years of sadness and sorrow
those who challenge, are really quite brave

so when you hear the river cry
apologise and thank it
for without it, you cant at all
douse the fire that you have lit

hoped you liked it! plz review!

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LQ

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Registered: 2006-12-04

Posts: 1,285

Re: Ballads

Ooh, nice. Thank you espeon!

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MathsIsFun

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Re: Ballads

VERY good ... gave me chills.

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John E. Franklin

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Registered: 2005-08-29

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Re: Ballads

Sounds impressive, I think, but I don't know what a moor is.
And what is this monster under the water thingy?
Not sure what this poem is trying to tell me.
Sounds really neat though!!
Big words, rhymes, just have to be smart to get it I guess.
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Oh, the ropes to the anchors or docks are moors?
So what is this white thread of mourning??
Is that the unhappy glaciers from the mountains down to the ocean??
Why are they unhappy??
When the glacier breaks off a big chunk and falls, then it looks different?
(a whole new picture is drawn?? global warming??)

Last edited by John E. Franklin (2007-02-15 10:28:06)

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MathsIsFun

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Re: Ballads

Moor: broad expanse of land often with marshes.

"Aye, wee lad, life on the moors is braw"

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espeon

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Registered: 2006-02-05

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Re: Ballads

lmfao!

the white thread is if you see it from a distance in birds eye view and its mourning because the people of the world abuse it.

note:the title does have a lot of significance to the ballad

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